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clipped, courteous,
and now you sleep soundly
while i lie, still -

(i’m okay.)

wrapped in insecurity;
would you put
something shiny
on the fourth digit
of my left hand to
prove that I am yours?

(i never wanted that before.)

or would you sooner
push me six feet down
until dirt creeps inside,
clogs my throat, lungs,
and pores?

(i don’t want to die anymore.)

i could go for miles, alone.
could walk over sand, brick,
gravel or stone without stumbling
or needing to catch my breath -

(in, out.)

but I did not mind your hand when
you offered it, did not mind the
steadiness, the sureness, the you-ness
of your footsteps matching mine.

(but i was never supposed to rely on it.)

please, honey, don’t be surprised when
i cry over you.
even on waters that seem so still
this hurricane girl doesn’t
know how to swim -- alone.
I don't like fighting with him.

And I probably shouldn't be allowed to write or upload so late at night, with an upset stomach and itchy eyes.

Comments, critiques, questions, favorites, and etc are always greatly appreciated.

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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm in love with the form and the flow of this particular poem - the way those parenthesized parts feel so added-in makes them feel like intimate interjections, further clues into the thoughts & feelings at the time. Intimacy, confessions and open-hearted observations, how can someone not love every inch of this? You've chosen your words and your structure well :) Brava, miss.
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kamcalste Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so, so much. :heart:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome miss :heart: Thank you for sharing something so beautiful!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is fantastic, Steph. I really liked this one. :heart:
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kamcalste Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That means a lot coming from you, Rachel. :heart: Thank you.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My absolute pleasure.
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LadyLincoln Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My heart is with you, dearheart. :heart:
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kamcalste Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:
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